Tuesday, July 31, 2007

Milky: my fanfiction

This is my fanfiction of Kiki's Delivery Service, one of Miyazaki Hayao's anime films.
If you want to borrow the dvd, I got one so please feel free to ask me. I think Paul also has a copy too.

It has been nearly thirteen years since the day Auntie Kiki saved the life of a young boy called Tombo who fell off an air ship. Sora, the son of Osono who owned a bakery in a city called Koriko, grew up listening to the story. It was quite strange to have a famous person living with him. All of his friends were jealous of him for being so close to her. But Sora didn’t think it was special. It didn’t mean he could fly. He remembered auntie Kiki telling him that the flying skill is something which was passed on through generations.
Sora heard his mother yelling.
“Kiki. Are you ready to go to Okusama’s place?”
“In a minute, Osono!”, said Kiki from her bedroom upstairs.
“Sora? Sora? Where are you?”, said Osono.
“Coming!!” said Sora in a grumpy face. He knew that he was about to be asked to look after Kaze and the bakery while his mother and auntie Kiki visited their friend’s house. They go every Thursday afternoon for what they call ‘ladies afternoon tea time’.

“Oh, don’t look so grumpy. We won’t be too long today. We are just dropping off some bread that Okusama has asked us to bring. She isn’t well you see.”
“I know”, said Sora, still looking grumpy.
“You look after Kaze and the shop while we are gone, please? If anything happens, you can always call your father. He is upstairs, sleeping.”
“hmm…Okay.”


Sora sat on the chair behind the counter and took a biscuit from the basket next to him. As he munched the biscuit, he looked out the window. He could see his mother and auntie Kiki walking away from the bakery. He watched them until they disappeared from the sight and then sighed.
‘I wish I could fly like auntie Kiki. She is so cool when she flies on her broom sti……’
Sora’s eyes caught auntie’s broom stick. It was leaning on the wall close to the door which leads to the kitchen. He could hear his heart pounding faster.
‘I wonder if I just…..play with it again.’
He looked around. “No one seems to be watching” he said to himself. He then quickly hopped off the chair and walked around the counter. When his hand nearly touched the broom stick, someone yelled.
“Sora! Don’t even think about it!”
Sora turned around and saw Kaze running towards him from the kitchen. She was wearing a yellow dress which has a large picture of sun flower in the front. But it was covered in paint. She must’ve been doing some painting in the lounge.
Sora gave Kaze an annoyed look and said “Think about what?”
“I know you were just trying to play with auntie Kiki’s broom. Mum always tells us not to play with it!”
“Shh. Be quiet. You might wake Dad up. eyIf you don’t tell mum, you can have a little go too. And I won’t tell her either.” He grinned at Kaze and continued.
“Who knows. You might be able to fly a bit like me.”
Sora lied. But this seemed to be the only way to persuade Kaze to let him play with the broom.
Kaze looked up at his face.
“You can’t fly!” said Kaze in angry voice.
“Yes I can. Well, only a bit though. Do you want me to show you?”
“Go on then. Let’s see it.”
Sora stepped over the broom stick. He has played with Kiki’s broom stick before. He has never actually flown only managing to lift a few inches off the floor before.
He breathed in and out, trying to stay calm. He stared at the tip of the broom stick, trying to concentrate. Then lightly, he kicked the floor. His body slowly went up in the air. After ten seconds, he landed back.
“Wow!! You really did it! You looked like a wizard!”, said Kaze in excitement.
“Do you think I could do that too?”
“Well, you gotta try”, said Sora as he stepped off the broom stick. He handed it over to Kaze.
Kaze hesitated and said “I’m scared. You remember the story about how auntie Kiki lost control of her old broom stick when she was trying to rescue Tombo, don’t you?”
“That was not a broom stick. Auntie said it was a push-broom that she borrowed from an old man. It wasn’t hers”, said Sora impatiently.
“But….”, said Kaze in frightened voice, tears coming out of her eyes. She looked up at Sora’s face, begging him to hop on the broom stick with her. Sora didn’t like the look on his sister’s face. She always gets her own way, he thought. If she was so scared, why doesn’t she just give up and watch me fly again? Bloody woman! Sora shook his head.
“All right, all right! Stop crying! But you have to hop on the back though coz I need to see where I’m going”.
Kaze nodded as she wiped tears from her eyes with her sleeves. Now her face was covered in paint.
“Are you ready?”
“…y…yes….”
Sora held the broom stick tight. He knew that he probably had to concentrate more to lift two people this time.
When he was just about to kick the floor, the front door of the bakery swung opened.
Osono and Kiki were standing outside the door, looking at two in shocked and terrified face.
“What are you two……!!!!”, said Osono. Sora could tell the anger rising in her mother’s face.
He could only think of doing one thing.
“Hold me tight, Kaze!” said Sora, kicking the floor as hard as he can. The broom lifted about one metre high. He bent his body forward so he could fly fast towards the door which was wide open.
They flew out of the bakery to the blue sky. The broom carried them higher and higher.Sora could hear his mother screaming, “Nooooo!! Sora!! Kaze!! Get back here!!!”

10 comments:

Chrimbinal said...

AAAA kiki's delivery service is awesome. Where are Jiji's relationcats ?

IdaPida said...

i don't know anything about anime or the film this is based on, but it's cute.

It is almost like you expect him not to be able to fly.
i guess that mean he has inherrited the gift then?
it reminds me of being a kid and pretending to fly, runing around with the broom between your legs.
Maybe i'm the only one who did that when i was young hehe.
You build the whole story very well, and it's easy to follow and read, it's no complicated long explanation, which i really like.
And i think that helps people who doesn't know much about the background keep up.
Well done Yoshie.
-Ida-

rachel said...

Hi Yoshie,

Well like Ida i am not familiar with anime. But with the way you wrote the fic is was not necessary to have any backstory. You described the characters well so anyone ignorant person like me could understand and get caught up in the story. Which is what a good fanfiction does.
I really liked how you described the build up to the ride on the broomstick. I really thought it was his mum catching him the first time the door opened. Great twist.

Aldous said...
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Aldous said...

Come on Yoshie, I wanna some more ,plz. It' s really a cute,simple story.And I totally enjoy the conversation between Kaze and sora, kind of cute, naughty. During the whole story, I can clearly see the temperamens of the different characters.

Milky said...

Thanks for your comment, Aldous.
I think I will try to write up more by Wednesday. I got a lot of ideas. I might add bits and pieces to describe the place in details or something to make it more juicy.

Milky said...

Thanks for your comment, Rachel.
I agree. I think Kiki isn't a famous film and it can put off people for reading my fanfic if it is difficult to follow. I think my fanfic will be perfect for people who like to read something creative but not too difficult to understand.

Milky said...

Thanks, Idapida. I was worried if people who don't even know about this film will understand and enjoy my fanfic. You proved it!! Cheers!! Yes, I'm thinking to make Osono (Sora's mum) 's great great grandfather being a wizard. Osono wasn't but Sora was. It's kind of like Muggles in Harry Potter. Sort of.... I'm also thinking to create a wizarding school or something. I won't tell you anymore as I want you to enjoy the final piece.

Milky said...

Thanks, Chrimbinal.
Don't worry. I will put Jiji's kittens in the story in the final work. I think Sora might steal one!!???

Minnie said...

hey Yoshie the stories great i like how you left it open at the end it lets the imagination wander. I like how he flys off at the end to avoid a telling lol and i agree with the others for thos who haven't seen it, its easy to get into. I thiink though the first paragraph needs to be trimmed a little a felt it was a lot if information in one sentence you could try reversing it eg."For thirteen years Sora had grown up listening to stories about his Aunt Kiki the hero who saved the young boy Tombo. Sora was the son of Osono who owned a bakery, in a city called Koriko and it was strange..." cant wait for the next installment :)